Desperate, she pressed her back against the tree trunk. Her breaths were ragged gasps and every sense acute. Her eyes darted sideways, watching. She listened. A rustling in the undergrowth and her chest contracted. Then an eerie silence descended.
With her courage finally restored, she realised her pursuer had driven her deeper into the forest than she’d every dared venture. Inches from where she stood, was the edge of a deep gully. She slid and clambered down the gully’s bank. In its depths, bracken and brambles, mosses and vines fought for dominance.
And nestled beneath them, she discovered fairy king, Oberon.
25 thoughts on “Fortune Shines”
Thank you Eileen. Friday Fictioneers challenges you to write a 100 word piece relating to a photo prompt. Fun.
This was a good response to the prompt. I could almost feel her fear as her heart raced. (You just need to make one little correction in the second paragraph. Where it says “… deeper than she’d every dared venture,” it should be “ever”.) You don’t have to publish my reply, so no one sees this note. It’s so easy to misspell a word when your fingers are flying across the keyboard, and really, this little error took nothing away from the story, which was very imaginative.
God bless you,
Cheryl, much appreciate your kind comments and for pointing out the spelling error. Need to keep on my toes!
LOL – doesn’t everybody? Thanks for taking it in the spirit it was given. I hate when I post something, and then when I read it again later, I find all sorts of errors. God bless you Diana!
What a suspenseful piece with a sweet ending. Simply magical! Welcome to Friday Fictioneers Di, great to see you here.
My first attempt at Friday Fictioneers proved to be lots of fun, Jessie. Thanks for your positive comment and your help with the link up. Still having some hiccoughs with the thumbnail photo etc!
This is wonderful…we could all use a fairy King now and then. The emotional and place descriptions are well written. Great piece, Di.
Ellespeth – it is quite a new experience to write such a short piece. I’m pleased to receive your positive feedback. Thank you.
That was a nice ending. I was expecting something altogether different.
Thank you Sandra. Pleased you found the ending a surprise.
Beautifully done Di. And The suspense is felt in very word. The end is a lovely surprise.
I appreciate your positive comments, Marg and am pleased you were surprised by the ending.
This story is very atmospheric, Diana. I can see it clearly and every detail allows us to feel her emotions. A wonderful debut to FF. Well done!
So nice to receive such positive feedback, Karen. Much appreciated. My first foray into FF was great fun.
I, too, ran out of breath just feeling her panic! Well done with a gentle end.
So pleased you enjoyed the story – thanks for taking the time to comment.
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. You had me out of breath reading. Nice feeling to it. BTW, it’s perfectly fine and preferred to copy and paste the photo prompt into your blog. No law says you have to as long as your story relates to the picture but it’s a nice way to connect.
Thank you so much, Rochelle, for your warm welcome and positive comments. Hopefully, I’ll copy and paste the photo prompt next time – I’m such a luddite when it comes to finding my way around websites, etc.
Aunty Di, I truly loved this! What suspense, I wanted more.
Hoda, thank you so much for checking out my blog. So pleased you found the story suspenseful. It was written in response to a photo cue – I wasn’t sure how to copy the photo into my blog, but hopefully next time I’ll be successful at that! xx
Diana, Welcome to Friday Fictioneers! Good and well-written story. Great description and a lovely happy ending. 🙂 —Susan
Appreciate the welcome to FF, Susan, and your positive comments. Thank you.
Welcome to FF Di, your story was full of suspense and magic. Very well done.
Thanks for the feedback Maree – pleased you enjoyed my piece. It was great fun to write.